Monday, December 10, 2012

"U Got the Look" - just a little late!

The lovely, Laura - over at "My Baffling Brain" - tagged me in the "U Got the Look" thingy back on November 8th and I completely forgot about it.  How about some e-cookies to repay you?  Sorry it took so long!  To take part in this I have to go to my current manuscript and find the word "look" and post the surrounding paragraphs, and then tag 5 other writers.  I am currently working on "Unless", which is the second part of my novel "Nameless" - yes they have two different titles, I haven't picked which one will be the overarching title yet. (smacks forehead)

Anyway - I am going to share the first "look" in my novel, Unless.  Ironically, the word is in the very first paragraph of it, so I'm sharing the first three paragraphs --

The body hanging from the noose was too small; the boy was only four years old.  Princess Dalia bit her lip to keep from crying out at the sight of the dead child.  He wasn’t even a healer.  If she made a sound, Dalia knew her father would punish her.  King Alined couldn’t see the hatred in her eyes and the LOOK upon her face, which was concealed by the veil.  Dalia knew he was angry enough she wore the grey silk dress.  The seamstress had made it for her before she left and King Alined forbade her from wearing it because of the color.  Grey would always be associated with healers.

“Definitely deserved,” one of the members of Court whispered to another.

Dalia wanted to scream and take her anger out upon the inconsiderate man, but she didn’t make a sound.  The executioner removed the body of the boy from the rope and tossed him to the side like the leftover food from the kitchens.  The child meant nothing to anyone.  But Dalia cared.  Every part of her was screaming for the pain to stop.  Speaking up now would mean certain death and she wouldn’t be able to help them.


Yep, it's a little gruesome.  Sorry - it's actually a scene which I also write from Edom's POV in the first part and it ties it together more.  Hope you liked it!  Now to tag a few victims err... others!

Allison at Geek Banter

If you've already done it, sorry!  If not, go ahead and do it! :)

Tomorrow I will be posting my thanks in the "Cheers, Cavanaugh Blogfest" - so make sure to come see it then! :)


  1. Hey,

    Sure it was a shocking begin, but I really enjoyed the excerpt... it LOOKS like a lot is going to happen, which is the point, I suppose, otherwise all my novels would be newsletters... sigh... I'm tired :)

    1. It's actually the beginning of the book - just part to. :) Lol, mine would be newsletters too!

  2. Great extract, it certainly makes you want to keep reading!

  3. Nice excerpt! I'm intrigued. :)

    Thanks for the tag. I'm back to writing poetry right now, but maybe I'll see what I can find in one of my previous novel drafts.

  4. Awesome read Krista, Princess Dalia going to have to do something!