Wednesday, May 20, 2015

The Writer's Voice Query and First 250 Words

Title: SILENT BEAUTY
Genre/Category: YA Contemporary, 57k

QUERY:

Struggling with Meniere’s disease and the death of her parents, Alanna is closed off to almost everyone. At seventeen, she should be worried about school dances or kissing boys, not about losing her hearing. The only thing normal in her life is her struggle to pass math.

Desperate not to flunk, Alanna agrees to get a tutor – Jared – who is the same kid she stood up for when a linebacker bullied him in the hallway. Jared is the first guy not to treat her differently because of her hearing aids. He makes an adorable effort at sign language and simplifies the hardest math questions for her. Even his obsession with Star Trek starts growing on Alanna. She wants to open up to him, but she’s afraid he’ll desert her if he learns about the accident that killed her parents, or her attempted suicide. Complicating matters is their shared bully, who knows the truth about Alanna’s attempted suicide since he was the only to pull her out of the car.

As Alanna finds herself falling for Jared, she wants to tell him everything. She must stop lying and accept herself or she’ll lose Jared and never be able to take control of her own life.


FIRST 250 WORDS:

The ball collided with my head, knocking me to the waxed floor. Yeah, yelling at the hearing impaired girl to move as a ball came at her… not the best plan. I should’ve been watching the balls instead of day dreaming about cute shirtless celebrities.

“Sorry Alanna!” The boy’s mouth moved and I managed to figure out what he was saying. The sounds muffled and ran together, but I could hear without my aids in. The words just didn’t always make sense.

Sitting up, I rubbed the sore spot. I didn’t wear my hearing-aids during gym class because I didn’t want them broken if someone threw a ball at my head. I could’ve left them in, but I felt safer taking them out. No one came running to make sure I was okay. No big surprise there. I straightened my dark blue gym shorts and stood. My feet took me straight to the bench. I assumed getting hit in the head meant I was “out”. The teacher, Mr. Carter, watched me with concern. I shrugged and waited. Whoever decided dodge ball was fun, never played with a competitive class of thirty-five students.

When I sat, the boy next to me moved three feet to the left. My fists clenched at my side. Hearing loss wasn’t a contagious disease, but everyone acted like it was. I glanced at the caged clock above the basketball hoop. Sweat ran down my cheek, but I refused to push up my sleeves.


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Thanks for reading my entry! :)

Friday, May 1, 2015

May Goals

There are only four more weeks left of school and my preschool job! I'm going to miss my little kiddos, but I will get to see some of them next year since we have three, four, and five year olds. :) I had a very busy March and I'm excited to tell you what's been going on with my goals!

Here are my goals from March:
* Write to 60,000 words on Camp NaNo novel, "Nothing Left to Lose"

* Read "Ilsa and the Happily Ever After" by Stephanie Perkins

I completed both of my goals from last month! Whew! I finished my rewrite of "Nothing Left to Lose" on April 13th. I rewrote a good chunk of the ending due to changing a major plot point and deleting one of the minor characters.


Close. It was the Dad's girlfriend I deleted. :) She wasn't really essential to the plot and had no development of character, so... good-bye character. :) While furiously rewriting my Camp NaNo novel, I did manage to read a few books!

Lonesome Beds and Bumpy Roads (Bed, #3) by Cassie Mae and Theresa Paolo
The Bane Chronicles by Cassandra Clare
Holding On (Holding On, #1) by Rachel Brownell
Isla and the Happily Ever After by Stephanie Perkins

Overall, it was a very good month. :)

Goals for May:
* Write to 30,000 on new novel, "Just About Average"

* Begin revisions for "Nothing Left to Lose"

* Read "Play On (Game On Book 4)" by Kyra Lennon

I hope your goals from April went well and that you enjoyed doing the A-Z Challenge or Camp NaNoWriMo! I'm crossing my fingers that this will be a great writing month. :) Happy May Day!